EXPLAIN FINANCIAL CIRCUMSTANCES: here you will provide the relevant information pertaining to your parent's financial situation with SPECIFIC examples and reasons. Examples are listed below - and remember whatever you use, make sure you have the evidence and paperwork to back it up. You may also leverage another school of similar competitiveness / level if you have a better offer from them (see below on HOW to do that with HUMILITY).
CONCLUSION: humble, polite, attitude of gratitude - thank them again, offer to have a call with your parents and the school to discuss further, offer supporting paperwork (if applicable), and affirm that you look forward to hearing from them soon.
STUDENT'S ID NUMBER
Dear NAME OF PERSON/CONTACT:
I am very happy to have been offered admission to NAME OF COLLEGE and I am grateful for the financial aid that you have given me. This experience has almost been a dream come true, however, my family is currently facing financial challenges and I am seeking further consideration for funding. Living in a single-parent home with three children has resulted in several economic constraints on my MOTHER/FATHER, who is the sole provider for the family. (INSERT EXAMPLE DESCRIBING THE GENERAL NATURE OF THE CHALLENGE).
My older brother is looking forward to CONTINUING his college education while my little sister, who is currently in grade 11, is now preparing to take the CSEC examinations in June 2018, which was a substantial cost to my mother due to extra-lessons, classes and fees. Additionally, she will have to find the fees to pay for my sister's education for the next two years of 6th form study. (INSERT SPECIFICS DESCRIBING THE CIRCUMSTANCE).
Coupled with this my mother has other debts and expenses that need to be paid off including mortgages, loans and other living expenses. My father was unemployed in 2020, and has now just received a job in 2021 which pays minimum wage. This means that he cannot easily contribute enough money to help support my family and my college education.
In Jamaica, our currency devalues on a daily basis and with an inflation rate of 4% and an exchange rate of $145 JMD to $1 USD, families often find it difficult to plan ahead especially for US denominated expenses. The business she operates simply does not generate enough money to sustain my college education as well as the education of my siblings.
I firmly believe that attending INSERT NAME OF COLLEGE will give me a head start in my academic and future career as I aim to become a successful INSERT CAREER PLAN. The knowledge and resources obtained from INSERT NAME OF COLLEGE will help to develop my skills in the field exponentially. Further, I believe if I obtain my qualifications at INSERT NAME OF COLLEGE I will be in a better position to ease the financial burden of my family in the very near future. I am aware that the award given by INSERT NAME OF COLLEGE is a very generous one, however, due to the financial circumstances at home, my parents will need to make my college decision solely on funding.
INSERT NAME OF COLLEGE is my top choice and I would definitely want the opportunity to attend. It is very difficult for my family to find an additional $10,500 (GIVE SPECIFIC FIGURE) and in light of this, I am requesting further financial assistance – whether in scholarships, grants or any other awards that may be open to me – to fully realize my dream of attending INSERT NAME OF COLLEGE. I assure you that if given the opportunity to attend, I will invest my energy, time and skill into contributing positively to the development of the INSERT NAME OF COLLEGE community. I hope that this will be favourably considered by you.
STUDENT'S FULL NAME HERE